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Author's Note: Special thanks to kouralilly, SAM-urai, musing5225 and Christopher.Harn for helping with/looking over this.


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INT. HOSPITAL - EVENING


Blurry POV shot of a white hospital wall.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
The walls pure as a newborn babe,
But the tears block her view,
All she can do is smell.
Smell all the sad stories before
her,
She smells them everywhere that
doesn't smell sterile,
Everywhere they didn't get to yet.
She remembers,
When she was a little girl,
Her room felt like this one



INT. CHILD'S ROOM - NIGHT


A little girl is huddled on the floor, knees to chest.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
Too big
Too many corners
Filled with the unknown
On those nights
She'd crawl
Towards the light
The safety
And whisper
Please hold me,
Mother



INT. HOSPITAL - EVENING


POV is clearer now. We can tell it's a hospital room. A NURSE
enters wearing a grim look on her face. She has the stone
faced look of a sad proffesional.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
The look on the nurse's face makes
her wonder,
How anyone could think no news is
good news,
In the eyes beneath the mask that
is her face,
There is road weary empathy from a
woman,
Like an exhausted swimmer,
She no longer has the energy.
She remembers
The last time she saw a face like
that.



EXT. OUTSIDE - DAY


Still POV. The location doesn't really matter. Overlay
transition between the Nurse's face and a TEENAGE BOY's.
They're wearing the same expression. The Boy is talking but
it's inaudible.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
It was on a boy who knew best,
Whose eyes held empathy,
And whose mask,
Held the promise of never,
She remembers...


Shot of a TEENAGE GIRL, head in hands, runnign home.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
Tear stained sidewalks,
On a blurry walk home,
She remembers...


Shot of TEENAGE GIRL hugging her MOTHER.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
The comfort,
And safety,
She remembers whispering,
Please hold me,
Mother.



INT. HOSPITAL - EVENING


WOMAN is in hospital bed with MAN standing next to her.
DOCTOR enters. He's talking his voice is inaudible.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
In a voice like disinfectant,
The doctor says what she already
knew,
There was nothing they could do,
The tears come then,
Not just hers,
But his,
Theirs,
This pain is theirs,
Like everything else,
They share it.
She remembers,
Everything else they shared.



INT. LIVING ROOM


Man is sitting on a couch nervously tapping his foot.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
The anticipation


Woman enters holding pregnancy test.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
The news


Man jumps up and hugs Woman. They are both about to burst
from joy.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
The joy



INT. EMERGENCY ROOM - NIGHT


Man is sitting in a chair too nervous to sleep.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
The sleepless nights,
The fear,


Man and Woman are sitting with a DOCTOR. He is delivering bad
news. Woman is about 4 months pregnant.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
The fear,
The dread,



INT. HOSPITAL - EVENING


Woman and Man are holding each other and crying.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
And now,
The sadness,
The loss.



INT. HOME - NIGHT


POV walking through a house.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
Later,
She finds herself back,
In that home of comfort,
That home she was hoping to
emulate,
That home they were going to build,
That home they will build,
But not tonight...


Find Mother in the kitchen.


NARRATOR (V.O.)
Tonight,
She whispers words,
She was hoping to hear,
Please hold me,
Mother.


THE END


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