just playing around a bit little REmix....
i was trying to edit down some of the beginning and moved the VOs in a bit earlier.
i also cut some of the space between the vocal lines themselves.
i think it could be nice to have some more instrumentation or sound between 1:20 - 1:40, after the first time the last line is said, to create some sort of a heighten dramatic point or whirlwind moment (does that make sense:)
i added the last line in two different possible placements, not sure though. i just felt like some sort of vocal line would be nice towards the end.