I'm not really good at writing screenplays haha. But here are the first couple of minutes for DELETED. I'm still going to make some changes but I just want to know what you guys think. I have a new character but I haven't really named her yet.
Desmond suffered amnesia from an accident that happened a long time ago. He's been trying to remember things ever since but nothing really seems to work out for him. He then meets Rachel from NYC in a Skype call. Rachel has history with Desmond long time ago before he lost most of his memories. Everytime Desmond sees Rachel, he gets flashbacks and he starts to remember things like a puzzle. Rachel is one of the only ways the he can remember things. He then falls in love with Rachel, but what he doesn't know is the painful past that lies ahead of him and it gets difficult for him as he progresses through his memories.
"The reason people find it hard to be happy is that they always see the past better than it was, the present worst than it is, and the future less resolved than it will be" -Marcel Pagnol
LIBRARY FOUNTAIN - DAY
Desmond sitting on a bench alone for a few seconds. Camera facing the back of the bench.
Close in to the side of his face (Camera on the left side of the bench)
Suddenly hears a voice before cutting to the next scene
(Someone): So how are you doing?
ROOM - DAY
Camera facing the person who said the line then switches to Desmond’s side.
(Desmond): I’m fine
(Desmond): *Thinking* Pretty sure *laughs*
(Someone): Any rage? Depression? ... Any?
(Desmond): No, I’m fine.. It’s been a good week for me
(Someone): … Alright! … I guess we’re... Good?
(Someone): Well, you’re looking great so I guess you’re telling the truth
(Someone): …. Did you.. Remember anything at all by any chance? ...Any flashbacks? Memories?
(Desmond): … No, no not really
They both look at each other for a short time in silence. And then...
(Someone): *Cell Phone Rings* Oh, excuse me *Leaves the room*
Camera facing Desmond.
Camera faces the front of the building. Desmond and that person will walks out of the building. Camera switches to
(Someone): Well, like I said.. If you need anything.. Just give me a call
(Someone): Well.. I’ll see you next week?
(Someone): Alrighty! I’ll see you next week then
Desmond and the person says goodbye to each other. Person leaves, camera facing Desmond. Camera switches back facing the building as Desmond turns to walk to the opposite direction.
POSTCARD SHOP - DAY
Camera facing cards being put on shelves. Camera switches facing Sheila. Desmond enters the door in the background.
(Desmond): Hey hey
(Sheila): So.. How’d it go?
(Desmond): It was alright.. Very comforting *Laughs*
(Sheila): Told you she is
(Sheila): Oh, the new cards just arrived this morning by the way.. It’s right there.
(Desmond): Really? *Goes to where the new postcards are at*
(Sheila): They shipped early, so it arrived today... What do you think?
(Desmond): Well.. They’re pretty nice I guess.. I like this one
(Sheila): Yeah, I really like those ones over there *Points to other postcards*
(Desmond): Looking nice
(Sheila): Just opened hours ago.. Nobody came yet so..
(Desmond): *Studies the postcards*
(Sheila): Alright! Uhm I’ll be at the back if you need anything.. If anyone comes just help them out with everything okay?
(Desmond): Sure, yeah I’ll do that
(Sheila): Cool *Leaves*
Camera facing Desmond as he studies the new postcards. Desmond picks up a specific postcard. Camera focuses on the postcard, the card is about memories.