Not sure where in my dark and perverse mind this came from, but:
I was thinking it could be fun (and funny) to develop a character so insecure with his manhood and masculinity that he tries (and fails) to compensate for it with his gun and how he talks about it.
For example: this guy is in situations — shooting range, hunting lodge, wherever — everything seems somewhat normal, when unprompted and out of nowhere, he interjects with an outburst about his "stiff, long, piece..." Everone around him is put-off and looks and him like a weirdo...
I think this kind of character could work as a few 30-second sketches throughout the episode. Or, maybe longer...? Or, maybe not-at-all! :P
INT. SHOOTING RANGE
MAN 1 and MAN 2 sitting side by side, cleaning their semi-automatics. MAN 1 is stoic and focused on his task while MAN 2 chatters incessantly.
MAN 2: Check out the length on this thing. Pretty sick, right? I tried showing this one chick I picked up at the bar and she practically left running. Poor girl was intimidated by the sheer size of it, can you blame her? Doesn’t matter though – she probably wouldn’t have been able to lift it, she was so small. Like, she looked breakable, dude. Find me a woman who can handle something this massive and – whoa, buddy - I’ll sign right up.
(laughs at own joke)
Y’feel me, right, bro?
MAN 1: (sighs audibly)
GENE and KELLY sit across DR. HESTON
DR. HESTON: "Gene? Kelly? I am Doctor Theodore Heston and I would like to help save your marriage. First off, what seems to be the problem? Lack of communication? Lack of trust? Lack of adventure? Jealousy? Adultry? What is it? That way we'll know what to work on. One step at a time. "
GENE: "I'll tell ya, doc! She's saying it's 'too small'!
KELLY: "I didn't say it was 'too small!' I just said it wasn't big enough!
GENE: "What do you mean it's not big enough?!"
KELLY: "It just doesn't satisfy me."
GENE: "Since when?!"
Kelly doesn't answer but looks away suspiciously.
GENE: "Since you saw Roger's huh?"
DR. HESTON: "Who might I ask is Roger?"
GENE: "Kelly's Yenta friend's husband and my old best friend."
KELLY: "You leave Grace out of this! "
Potential dialogue for the Main Character if they are part of a gang of Bank Robbers:
"We need big, bulging pieces like this (referring to his own Gun) for this job - cocked and loaded, ready to spew. We can't go in there spraying with just Semi's!"
Potential dialogue for the Main Character if they are part of a Deer Hunting trip:
"Look at all those big, young bucks out there... They don't know what's comin' for 'em. Oh yeah, I'm about to pull down this zipper (to his rifle bag) and whip out my gigantic piece. I'll wrap my hands around it, feel its girth, and then unload."
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